Stones they were not,diamonds rather
and blindfolded,but still the dull sheen
tore my heart...
Teardrops scalding away her salty skin
It was still the smile which i saw
and the same tragic smile bled in my heart....
Cool calculated moves of the player
replaced the zealous quirkiness of the lover...
and the zeal shone in my heart....
The chained melody screaming to fly
begging the rainbow to be a lilltle low
Alas the rainbow wudnt dream of so...
ant it was still the rainbow which
echoes in my heart...
The dreams of oblivion!!!!
The ashes of "that"song
Are right here infront of me
The echoes of silence,
The scarred heart
Today I drown them in the sea.....
and blindfolded,but still the dull sheen
tore my heart...
Teardrops scalding away her salty skin
It was still the smile which i saw
and the same tragic smile bled in my heart....
Cool calculated moves of the player
replaced the zealous quirkiness of the lover...
and the zeal shone in my heart....
The chained melody screaming to fly
begging the rainbow to be a lilltle low
Alas the rainbow wudnt dream of so...
ant it was still the rainbow which
echoes in my heart...
The dreams of oblivion!!!!
The ashes of "that"song
Are right here infront of me
The echoes of silence,
The scarred heart
Today I drown them in the sea.....
whoa.. a poem of macabre as subject... nicely written.. write a few more and you would be a fiery poet i'm sure.. :)
ReplyDeletethanx pratik....
Deleteits encouragement from all the readers (even if there are few :P) which makes my day...
ratika
I especially enjoyed your final stanza--an emotive capture. Also I love the picture in your header--delights my eyes!
ReplyDeletethanx,
ReplyDeleteYou yourself are a great writer.
happy writing
I like the opening and closing stanzas...deep emotional echoes in your words ~
ReplyDeleteTHANKS HEAVEN...:)
ReplyDeleteYou have written a poem of heart-felt deep feeling here. I also VERY much liked the last stanza..
ReplyDeletemary,
ReplyDeletethanks...im in love with the dog in ur picture...:)
guess he is urs..:)
"The same tragic smile bled in my heart". Very powerful line.......I love your header photo - cool colors and funky bike! Way cool!
ReplyDeleteStrong emotion! "Today I drown them in the sea" love that line!
ReplyDeleteI too loved your closing stanza--great write!
ReplyDeleteWhat a lush and sensual poem! Could almost taste that saltiness--I love that phrase of begging the rainbow to be a little low--so clever :-)
ReplyDeletesherry,
ReplyDeleteI have been following ur poetry as well for a long time...i hope I write as well as u someday...:)
thanks sarav,audrey and laura.