Friday, September 27, 2013

Shrouded night

The sense of loss was
Not evident in your
Stoned visage,
Nor your spirited soul
Reeked of
Disappointed destiny.

I noticed the pattern
Below your frosted bourbon,
The tale of jilted name,
Peeping through the letter,
Your manicured talon traced.

The layered, sparkling gloss,
Unsuccessfully veiling,
The jaded smile.

"Trance it is.",
You blasted my ear,
Clanking your heels,
On wooden floor,
Flipping your wild mane,
Aimlessly at bodies
With name less faces.

The sense of loss was
Not evident in phosphorescent
Shadows.
Nor the neon lights,
Reeked of disappointed destiny.
I noticed the despondence ,
In the dark circles around
Your eyes,
Whispering the romance
Of your sleepless nights.

Truth bared itself
In harsh full moon
When the silver threads
Shook the uncomfortable existence
Of your fragile heart.

23 comments:

  1. Gave me shivers...powerful writing!!

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  2. "The tale of jilted name,
    Peeping through the letter,
    Your manicured talon traced"
    Love that...it speaks so much
    in just those few words.
    Your poem is so full of emotion
    and so well communicated.

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  3. Oh, that uncomfortable existence. You allowed me to feel it.

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    1. thank you Kim, im glad I can reach out to you and others.

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  4. Truth bared itself
    In harsh full moon
    When the silver threads
    Shook the uncomfortable existence
    Of your fragile heart.

    Terrific ending!

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  5. some persons are indeed very cold hearted

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  6. yes they are, but there is always some reason behind that.

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  7. What I really enjoyed about your poem is the attention to little details which bring the story to life, such as :
    I noticed the pattern
    Below your frosted bourbon,
    The tale of jilted name...

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  8. This is indeed a dark poem, and yet the moments you included, the character of night, "the dark circles under your eyes," such imagery made this a singularly good poem. Thanks for posting at Real Toads! Amy

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    1. thank you amy... :)
      though I wish I could write frequently.

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  9. Wow ... now this is the power of words ... amazingly haunting piece ... superb ... one of my favorites of yours !!!

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  10. Should I tell you, how much I loved it....read it thrice...such a wildness...beauty...amazing write-up :)

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