The sense of loss was
Not evident in your
Stoned visage,
Nor your spirited soul
Reeked of
Disappointed destiny.
Not evident in your
Stoned visage,
Nor your spirited soul
Reeked of
Disappointed destiny.
I noticed the pattern
Below your frosted bourbon,
The tale of jilted name,
Peeping through the letter,
Your manicured talon traced.
Below your frosted bourbon,
The tale of jilted name,
Peeping through the letter,
Your manicured talon traced.
The layered, sparkling gloss,
Unsuccessfully veiling,
The jaded smile.
Unsuccessfully veiling,
The jaded smile.
"Trance it is.",
You blasted my ear,
Clanking your heels,
On wooden floor,
Flipping your wild mane,
Aimlessly at bodies
With name less faces.
You blasted my ear,
Clanking your heels,
On wooden floor,
Flipping your wild mane,
Aimlessly at bodies
With name less faces.
The sense of loss was
Not evident in phosphorescent
Shadows.
Nor the neon lights,
Reeked of disappointed destiny.
I noticed the despondence ,
In the dark circles around
Your eyes,
Whispering the romance
Of your sleepless nights.
Not evident in phosphorescent
Shadows.
Nor the neon lights,
Reeked of disappointed destiny.
I noticed the despondence ,
In the dark circles around
Your eyes,
Whispering the romance
Of your sleepless nights.
Truth bared itself
In harsh full moon
When the silver threads
Shook the uncomfortable existence
Of your fragile heart.
In harsh full moon
When the silver threads
Shook the uncomfortable existence
Of your fragile heart.
Well written !!!
ReplyDeletethank you deepak and welcome to the blog.
DeleteGave me shivers...powerful writing!!
ReplyDeletethank you anne, hope you come back for more.
Delete"The tale of jilted name,
ReplyDeletePeeping through the letter,
Your manicured talon traced"
Love that...it speaks so much
in just those few words.
Your poem is so full of emotion
and so well communicated.
thank you susie for such a generous comment.
Deletewhew chills indeed.. great post...
ReplyDeletethank you robert!!
DeleteOh, that uncomfortable existence. You allowed me to feel it.
ReplyDeletethank you Kim, im glad I can reach out to you and others.
DeleteTruth bared itself
ReplyDeleteIn harsh full moon
When the silver threads
Shook the uncomfortable existence
Of your fragile heart.
Terrific ending!
thanks debi..
Deletesome persons are indeed very cold hearted
ReplyDeleteyes they are, but there is always some reason behind that.
ReplyDeleteWhat I really enjoyed about your poem is the attention to little details which bring the story to life, such as :
ReplyDeleteI noticed the pattern
Below your frosted bourbon,
The tale of jilted name...
thank you so much kerry... :)
DeleteThis is indeed a dark poem, and yet the moments you included, the character of night, "the dark circles under your eyes," such imagery made this a singularly good poem. Thanks for posting at Real Toads! Amy
ReplyDeletethank you amy... :)
Deletethough I wish I could write frequently.
Wow ... now this is the power of words ... amazingly haunting piece ... superb ... one of my favorites of yours !!!
ReplyDeletethank you amrit.
DeleteShould I tell you, how much I loved it....read it thrice...such a wildness...beauty...amazing write-up :)
ReplyDeletethanks sadia... :)
Deletewowww....
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