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It was one of those days, Ramdeen dreaded like hell. The days when sun
and rain both refused to grace Mumbai skies. Grey intimidated the clouds
instead of pristine white. Ramdeen buttoned his khakhi shirt with a heavy
heart, because he didn’t feel like going to work. He wished he could go to Worli
sea-link, buy himself some chana murmura,
cutting chai, those sold by small kids in white disposable cups and watch
the youngsters strolling by. Youth.... always energized him whenever he was bogged
down by the monotony of life, more so it reminded him of Karan. The truth about
truth is that it hurts, and today it did no less. It pinched him where it had hurt
most.
He finished buttoning his shirt, combed his hair, or what
was left of it. Today was not the day to mull over his thinning hairs or for
that matter Karan, because it was a sunday when Mumbai decides to shed
corporate attire in lieu of casuals. In other words his cab would have more
guests than his house had in years. His house has not seen any face
other than his own in years, even he
liked to spend more time in his taxi rather than his house. It was suffocating
without Karan and Shashi, the only two people in the world who meant world to
him.
CST station was the sure bet to get his bohni. If Shashi was alive she would chew his years off for not
starting with a good bohni . But she was not , and still he was worried about
what would she think. But then they were married for thirty years before she
died.
It was already 2:00 in the afternoon and he had dropped a
few nagging couples, 1-2 elderly hotshot business men and a few college
students. Ahh!! They were his favorite customers , their incessant chatter,
petty fights, always lightened him up. The day seemed never ending to him. What’s
wrong with him today?
He didn’t feel like working and decided to call it a day,
after all it was Sunday for him too. May be age was getting to him. He had not
realized but he was already heading towards his favorite dhabha where the 18 something,a lanky guy, Kishore served latest gossip
along with cheap food. Today even Kishore was not able to lift his spirits. He missed
home food, he missed his wife and son. The truth about truth…it hurts.
He would clean his taxi today, thats the last remainder of
his past and making it gleam always took his mind off other macabre things like
he was alone in this whole big bad world. Now what’s that? How careless of
someone to leave their book in the backseat. A novel,by some Amitav Ghosh. A crisp white , unfolded piece
of paper fell from it, a love letter may be. What harm would it do, if he read
it?
“Dear Mom,
I love you all but I’m not happy and
I’m ending my life.
No one is responsible .
Love ,Sam.”
This could not be happening to him. It was like déjà vu. He lost
his son, Karan, to this monster called suicide. His Karan, so young, so
vivacious, always finding new pranks to make them laugh. The year he decided to
end his life so cruelly, leaving him and his wife stranded with a lot of unanswered
questions, was his second year at college. Karan was everything a dad could wish
for. His sudden decision to end his life became something of an untold story,
known to none. His short note did nothing to reveal the story.
“Dear dad and mom,
I love you both but im not happy with life.
I’m ending my
life and no one is responsible for it.
Love ,
Karan.”
He could not forget the day when they found Karan’s body hanging
lifeless from ceiling fan. They did not understand the reason for his suicide. They
tried everything but to no avail. Shashi never came out of that shock and
withered away like a dead flower. Within
three years he lost everything that was important to him.
No, he could not let this happen to someone else. He has had
too much of a trauma to see someone else suffer the same fate. Nobody should be
allowed to go through such hellish experience. He would find the owner of the
book. It might not be too late and that unfolded paper seemed freshly written. Who
could it be?Definitely not one of the nagging couples or the businessmen with
the crisp suit. Sam..seemed like some young kid. May be
one of the college girls. The silent one did seem a bit of a loner. Now only if
the book had some name. He flipped the book open. Bingo ! Its from a library.
“Hello ! I found a book belonging
to your, can you give me the name & address of the person who issued it?”
“of course I would return it to the
girl, whats her name? Sambhavna… “
“I got it, thanks so much.”
Ramdeen’s taxi was running to save some young soul. The
untold story needed to be told today.
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because sometimes Sadness can save a life too?!:)
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+Not Just My Allegories+
thanks anisha...:)
ReplyDeletepain, Gothic stories are always beautiful in a very unconventional way...and you have delivered it beautifully
ReplyDeletethanks a lot dreamer..
ReplyDeleteNicely written Asteria!
ReplyDeletethank you suresh sir..
ReplyDeleteThats a very emotional piece. The way you described Ramdeen's day and his pain is impeccable.
ReplyDeletewould like to read it again.. It reminded me something... :) All the very best..
ReplyDeleteThanks DS, and Ayushi...most welcome...feel free to read it any time.
ReplyDeleteyoung men and women feeling depressed and committing suicide is a serious pan Indian problem.unfortunately they dont understand how badly hurt the survivors are. nice story.
ReplyDeleteand thanks for your generous comments.
That was a beautiful one, Ratika. As usual your writing has a distinct style that makes it fascinating. I especially like the first half where your style is in full flow.
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ReplyDeleteNicely done asteria! If only everyone was human enough to help others - be it saving a life or pushing a vehicle gone dead, the world would be a much better place!
ReplyDeletethanks a lot deepa, I loved yours as well..something different to read.
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ReplyDeleteYou have penned down the story so beautifully..emotional piece..
ReplyDeleteATB for BAT
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http://odizzey.wordpress.com/2012/10/07/an-untold-story/
unable to take the pressure...ppl shud always find somone to confine their untold stories to...rather then taking the drastic step...nicely written
ReplyDeleteATB for BAT :)
Hope he is not too late and there is not one more Untold Story!!
ReplyDeleteWell written.
thanks karan, aativas and odyzz.
ReplyDeleteThis one was very touchy post.
ReplyDeleteAll the best Jagat di :P :)
A serious issue dealt with in an impeccable style and the narration is simply superb...never boring even for a second....Kudos :)
ReplyDeletethanks jaish...its a compliment coming from you.
ReplyDeletereshmi dear thanks a lot
Very well expressed story, the emotions you depicted in the story really came out and gave life to the story.Liked the way it ended in a positive note :)
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I really like the way you sequenced everything and the end of the story..A touching one!
ReplyDeleteAll the very best for BAT 32 :) ..
Very well narrated!ATB for BAT!
ReplyDeleteI loved the last sentence.
ReplyDeleteThe post was very nice and easy to understand.
Let Ramdeen reach the place soon... otherwise it would be hard for the girl parents to digest. Good post..
ReplyDeleteKeep writing..
Someone is Special
thanks SIS, megha, arjun, rohan, kshitij.
ReplyDeleteWow, nicely knitted words with brilliant flow ... I am not sure how I missed reading your post earlier...
ReplyDeleteno issues amit...thanks for the appreciation..:)
ReplyDeleteA touching, moving read chips. You drew me in, you've got a gift for this.
ReplyDeletethanks poet,
ReplyDeleteI thought you only read poetries..:)