I burned the moon
Flames engulfing
Me and my soul
Alleviating the chill
Your icicle stare
Seeped in my bones.
Flames engulfing
Me and my soul
Alleviating the chill
Your icicle stare
Seeped in my bones.
I drank the ocean
Waves lashing
At my heart
Quenching the parched dreams
Your insatiable will
Scorched my skin.
Waves lashing
At my heart
Quenching the parched dreams
Your insatiable will
Scorched my skin.
Irony played me
Like a puppet
On the threads
Our resemblance
Shone in the fact
That I loved you
And you loved you.
Like a puppet
On the threads
Our resemblance
Shone in the fact
That I loved you
And you loved you.
strong words at the end.. a nice poem. short and striking.
ReplyDeletejust one thing. the label unequited love is wrong, it should be unrequited love. :)
Thank you, ill correct the spelling it was a new keyboards mistake...:)
DeleteNice weave of words.
ReplyDeleteshowing the glimpses... :)
Keep writing often.
Thank u so much vivek..
DeleteBeautiful
ReplyDelete:)
DeleteUnrequited love hurts. Tough when someone you love is all about themselves. A dead on depiction.
ReplyDeleteCaustic comments from ur loved ones can drive u to write this..
DeleteBeing self centered is a trend these days....
ReplyDeleteLoved the last para....
Rise of self obsession..
DeleteAnd the last Line,,, u nailed it therein .
ReplyDeleteN i got called a plagiarist for that,,:(
DeleteAnd irony it truly is!
ReplyDeleteHappens....:)
DeleteOh god......one of ur best.......wats up, everyone is cuming with posts on unrequited love? First tom , now u
ReplyDeleteHow do we say it? Its trending...
DeleteHmmm :/
DeleteStrong emotions ... powerful words ... hmmm !!!
ReplyDeletethank you..:)
DeleteThat last verse on unrequited love hurts ~
ReplyDeleteGood one ~
truth hurts..
Deleteyes it hurts when love is not responded back
ReplyDeleteExcellently done--and those last lines sat it all!
ReplyDeleteWow...well done, and the ending is so powerful.
ReplyDeleteOh wow, I remember loves like that. Ouch. Love "I burned the moon" and "drank the ocean". perfect ending, too.
ReplyDeleteAsteria, I was married to a narcissist, and it was exactly like that. I could have swallowed an elephant, for all he cared, unless it was HIS elephant. Your opening lines on each stanza are perfect. Amy
ReplyDeletehey amy,
Deletewe all have someone or the other who treats us like that and i am so glad that you came out of that relationship.
cheers to your life and new things.
last lines so powerful... truth can be so painful.
ReplyDeleteTouched...
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