Friday, March 15, 2013

The Unknown...!!!!!

This post is for mary's mixed bag challenge by Kerry on Imaginary garden with real toads and the challenge can be found here .

                                                   




The devil in my bag squirmed and screamed,
to fan out his wanton desires,
overloading my starved soul,
with his quixotic illusions.
The angel in my other whispered,
softly to my parched dreams,
"caving in is easy, walling up is right."
Manic monologue ascending in my soul.
Devil's carousal roped me in,
bidding me to surrender to my own poison,
Angel's chanting reverberating through my soul,
in my soul...
The smokescreen I did not see,
Was I held by the angel in my bag,
or clutched by the devil's claw
All I see are the serpents and the fangs and the 
devil smirking on my undead grave.
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35 comments:

  1. Amrit SinhaMarch 15, 2013 at 9:15 AM

    This is scary .... beautifully described !!!

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  2. Kerry O'ConnorMarch 15, 2013 at 9:17 AM

    You have given voice to an age-old dilemma in this poem. The thought of being held in the bag oneself, either in the hand of devil or angel, is an interesting conundrum.

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    1. asteria's canvassMarch 17, 2013 at 11:18 AM

      it is indeed an old age dilemma,to follow the right but difficult path or the easy but sinful path..

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  3. MalinyMarch 15, 2013 at 9:57 AM

    That was an intense poem . The mental turmoil of being caught between the temptations of devil and the goodness of angel has been sketched out beautifully . Great work and good choice of words !

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  4. Sherry Blue SkyMarch 15, 2013 at 10:06 AM

    What an imaginative response to the prompt! Cool write, kiddo! Made me think.

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    1. asteria's canvassMarch 17, 2013 at 11:23 AM

      thanks sherry,i wanted to write sunshine poem.. Bt heart is troubled and words are dark..

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  5. MixiMarch 15, 2013 at 11:35 AM

    Wow! Such an evocative piece! Dark and scary, but with a glimmer of light shining through it. You write with an elegance I never manage to achieve in my poems :)

    Beautiful!

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  6. Kay L. DaviesMarch 15, 2013 at 12:19 PM

    "undead grave"...wow!
    Definitely the good and evil suggested by the prompt. A fabulous write.
    K

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  7. MaryMarch 15, 2013 at 12:24 PM

    This was frightening. I do hope for a positive conclusion.

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    1. asteria's canvassMarch 17, 2013 at 11:26 AM

      hi mary,wouldnt life be boring if it was all positive..

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  8. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerMarch 15, 2013 at 2:26 PM

    Scary write!! And I love it!

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  9. AnonymousMarch 15, 2013 at 4:53 PM

    I hope for one as well.

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  10. UnknownMarch 15, 2013 at 10:36 PM

    beautifully visualized and written... nice ornamental words used to make the readers imagine the setting..

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  11. Sri ValliMarch 15, 2013 at 10:59 PM

    Loved the way you gave scary feel to this poem! Beautifully written :)

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  12. Jennifer WagnerMarch 15, 2013 at 11:31 PM

    The fantasy imagery is rich and dark--I like this genre on you.

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  13. The Solitary WriterMarch 16, 2013 at 12:06 AM

    Too Good Asteria! Intense!

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  14. LLM CallingMarch 16, 2013 at 2:40 AM

    terrifying, glad I didn't read this before bed :)

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  15. umashankarMarch 16, 2013 at 8:44 PM

    Beautiful portrayal of inner conflict.

    PS: Check the penultimate line.

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  16. Sini RachelMarch 17, 2013 at 2:31 AM

    My take away from this poem -
    You choose the evil once and then it sticks with you, never letting go... Shows you a beautiful picture first and then mauls you.

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    1. asteria's canvassMarch 18, 2013 at 6:05 AM

      well,each one takes something different from words,i just write..

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  17. UnknownMarch 17, 2013 at 9:45 AM

    Soul being torn apart by the devil and the divine.. really in depth portrayal of this bizarre situation..
    :) *clap clap clap* :)

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    1. asteria's canvassMarch 19, 2013 at 11:02 AM

      thats a complement coming from the master of dark and negative..

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  18. Susie ClevengerMarch 17, 2013 at 1:03 PM

    So scary, but I so understand what you are saying. There seems to always be a wrestle with some sort of dragon and angel. Such a creative write!

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    1. asteria's canvassMarch 18, 2013 at 6:03 AM

      hi susie,welcome to the blog,and i believe it happens with each one of us.

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  19. Sarah malikMarch 25, 2013 at 3:48 AM

    you have a knack for poetry i must say. Read many posts of urs but it was reflection and this one that totally impressed me.
    Following you to read more. keep blogging :)

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